After talking to my teacher and doing the pitch, I have decided to change my story line slightly.
Here are some of the changes..
- She will go on a run at 9.00am
- There will be only one man who stabs her with a syringe instead of suffocating her with a cloth.
- The person who he is demanding to know about is the person that will save her not a mysterious man.
- The man doesn't pull out a knife, the woman comes on a motorbike and shoots him from afar.
- The two women ride away on a motorbike together, so it is clear they know eachother and it was the plan all along to kill him..
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